Change to Narrative

For our second rough cut we are going to slightly change our narrative and possibly have two alternative openings.
From looking at the footage from our central protagonist sitting in the bar we felt this looks at bit long winded and doesn't get the audiences attention immediately we considered starting the film with the flashback then fading into the bar afterwards and the voiceover playing over this, we like the idea of the film starting and us hearing footsteps as the first noise we hear.

We feel this is a much more exciting and interesting start to our film and also we felt we may have to squeeze too much into our two minutes if we had inside the bar-flashback-back to the bar. Also this way we can have a nice transition ending the flashback into the bar. We also shot two alternatives of either zooming into our central protagonists eye showing the red or zooming into his mouth showing his fangs and then into darkness and fading back out of his drink.

Also our film is no longer in French, due to the fact that we could not convincingly achieve the voiceover in French or gain feedback from a range of French speakers for our film, we also felt that our film was quite complex without the French language and that it may be too complex when including French.